Feedback From Pitch (first draft)

Once we had a film idea, we had to create a pitch for it which had to be presented to our whole class. Once we have finished presenting, we were given feedback on what to do to improve our presentation.


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Pitch (first draft)

Set for "The Journey of self-discovery" title sequence

The initial idea for our title sequence is to recall the actions of Louise in the morning to show her boring, mundane life in London. These images below are some of the set where my title sequence will be taking place (bedroom & bathroom). The first pictures are of the bedroom we plan to shoot our title sequence in, as the setting of our film is London city. This bedroom is set in  greater London and you can see the building in London which shows it is a miserable place to be in (links to the narrative). however, we have decided not to shoot the film in this bedroom as it is too masculine for the main character. in stead we have decided to use a more feminine bedroom in Greater London instead so the bedroom matches the personality of the main character. Underneath the bedroom images is ones of a bathroom which is another setting for our title sequence. We think this bathroom is right for our sequence as it is basic and simple, which shows that Louise is a normal woman with basic necessities. Also, the room has a mirror which would be good to us in different shots to show the characters expressions more easily.

Narrative Idea- The Journey of Self-Discovery

For my AS media coursework title sequence I am working with Michael knight to create a title sequence for a feel good drama. we have been heavily influenced by the following films:
The Secret Life of Walter Mitty (Ben Stiller, US, 2013)
Jerry Maguire  (Carmon Crow, US, 1996)
Forest Gump (Robert Zemeckis, US, 1994)


film title
Me and Michael have decided that the name of our film is going to be 'The Journey of Self-Discovery'. we have decided this name as it is the basis of the narrative, as the main character is on a journey to India, whilst finding herself and her purpose in life as well.

Genre
Feel-good drama

Conventions to consider

• Subplot of romance
• Miserable/sad beginning
• Happy ending
• Main character following a path/ journey
• Moral or character has learnt something

Todorov Narrative

Equilibrium
a women (Louise Brown) is stuck in a dead end office job which she hates, which involves endless amount of work, unpaid overtime and sexist comments from the staff/boss in a patriarchal society. one guy who is the main perpetrator of these comments is Mike Healy She dreams that one day she could travel the world and experience new cultures and sharing her own experiences, as well as finding herself in the world she lives in, not just the office she works in.

Disequilibrium
After having a massive breakdown at work, Louise is fired from her job and kicked out of her flat shared with her friend, as she count afford to pay her rent, Louise had no where to go and decided to travel the world to get away from her depressing life in London.

Recognition
Realising she has nothing left in London, Louise uses her life saving to travel round the world to try and 'find herself' and a new purpose for her in life.

Attempt to repair equilibrium
She ends up in India where she managed to find a place to stay with a local Indian family. There, she bond a young Indian girl who dreams of becoming a teacher. The woman then has a epiphany and realises how lucky she was in London and decides to help the girl fulfil her dream buy helping girls get an education, even though the odds/government is against her. This is her new goal.

New Equilibrium
Louise managed to break though and now all Indian girls  in that village can get an education for free so all girls can fulfil their dreams of life. Louise now stays in India and lives a happy life as the founder of an organisation, which helps girls in India get an education. Louise meets a missionary there which she has a relationship with together.

Main Characters/ Propp's character type
Louise Brown
Age-36
Character: main character, protagonist
Occupation- unemployed
Function/ relationship to other characters- (main character) helps girls get an education in India

Mike Healy
Age- 42
Character: supporting role, antagonist
Occupation- office work
Function/ relationship to other characters- antagonist to Louise, makes her work life a misery

Anita Davar
Age- 11
Character: supporting character, helper
Occupation-pupil
Function/ relationship to other characters- friend of Louise

Matthew King- love interest of Louise
Age- 39
Character: supporting role, damsel in distress
Occupation- missionary
Function/ relationship to other characters- love interest of Louise

Comparable films

• The Secret Life of Walter Mitty
• Eat Pray Love
• Forrest Gump

Target audience
Age 13-40
Gender- women
Personality traits- likes romance films, companionship with main character

STINCS For Title Sequence

These are our STINCS for our title sequence of a feel good drama. This will help us layout the basic structure of our film and what we need to include in the title sequence.

Setting
London Office Buildings
Rural India

Theme
friendship
human rights
politics
self discovery

Iconography
London- sky scrapers, taxis, modern technology, grey/dull officewear
India- shack houses, cultural clothing, rickshaws, little/no technology

Narrative
(Refer to previous post)

Characters
Louise Brown- main character
Mike Healy- villain
Anita Davar- young Indian girl
Matthew King- love interest of Louise

Style
uplifting
credits planted around the scene
slow pace

Planning for Film Idea

Title Sequence Designer Saul Bass

Bass is the title sequence designer I looked at for my coursework. I decided to look at this designer as he is one of the most popular title sequence designers which has influence many designers of today. an example of his work is The Pink Panther. I liked the animation in his text which has influenced me to something similar for my title sequence, but on a smaller scale.